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Evelyn Griffith's avatar

This is so amazing! Wonderful opening chapter!

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

Thanks for reading! 🫶

Wandering Word's avatar

Incredible tension in this one. The part that really hit me was the dad just yapping away about his personal life while Ava is just sitting there having an existential crisis. You'll forgive me if I'm slow to it but I'll definitely be reading more!

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

Thank you so much! I’m so glad that tension came through. Ava feeling isolated in that moment was so important to me. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment! 🫶

Wandering Word's avatar

I am happy to do my part to support!

Cal C Long's avatar

Colour me intrigued! I really felt the dad’s desperation and the protag’s sense of self-sacrifice. The watch as an emotional link was nicely done. I’ll be following along to see where this leads. 👏🏻

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

Thanks so much! I’m really glad the emotional thread came through, especially the watch. Appreciate you following along! 🫶

SciFiVirteleon's avatar

Great opening chapter! Excellent storytelling, and unfortunately a very realistic future. How many chapters will there be?

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

Thank you so much for your kind words! Around 40 chapters 😬 it’s originally a novel but I’m revising it as I go

SciFiVirteleon's avatar

That’s quite a number, great!