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Wandering Word's avatar

The first portion of this chapter describing their consciousness being transfered is so visceral. It reminded me of the deep nerve pain of getting a filling with not enough anesthesia and it made it all the more uncomfortable. Bravo!

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

Thank you! I’m so glad the scene had the impact I was aiming for. I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts! 🫶

Cal C Long's avatar

The jarring nature of having your consciousness plunged into a virtual world was well described. Lots of intrigue built with the error messages, ghostly words and unexpected locations. I’m a sucker for deadly academies.

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

That’s so kind. I appreciate it! Deadly academies are my jam. Hope this one does its job. 🤍

Helene's avatar

I love the concept! Your writing is gripping and atmospheric, the setting of the eerie ferry is deliciously ghosty, and the AI guide too. I’m not usually a sci-fi reader, but this intrigues me. I’ll keep following along!

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

I’m thrilled it intrigues you. Thanks for the lovely comment! 🤍

Helene's avatar

I was also thinking this would make for a great TV series!

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

That would be a dream, thank you! 😊

SciFiVirteleon's avatar

Wow, a potential path of no return! And I can say that everyone in Ava’s place would think the same: “But if I die here, I’ll wake up in reality?”

I know I would.

Helena Ward | Author's avatar

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on it! 🫶

SciFiVirteleon's avatar

It’s great, and I can’t wait to see what’s next!