The first portion of this chapter describing their consciousness being transfered is so visceral. It reminded me of the deep nerve pain of getting a filling with not enough anesthesia and it made it all the more uncomfortable. Bravo!
The jarring nature of having your consciousness plunged into a virtual world was well described. Lots of intrigue built with the error messages, ghostly words and unexpected locations. I’m a sucker for deadly academies.
I love the concept! Your writing is gripping and atmospheric, the setting of the eerie ferry is deliciously ghosty, and the AI guide too. I’m not usually a sci-fi reader, but this intrigues me. I’ll keep following along!
Great question! The VR work program was designed to run while she sleeps, so under normal circumstances she’d just wake up in the real world like nothing happened. But something went wrong before she completed the onboarding process, so she never learned how the system works and ended up accidentally trapped at the academy. Thanks so much for reading!
Ahh, I see what you’re saying. Here I am thinking of people who might need to get out of it because something is wrong in the simulation, or simply to pee, lol.
The first portion of this chapter describing their consciousness being transfered is so visceral. It reminded me of the deep nerve pain of getting a filling with not enough anesthesia and it made it all the more uncomfortable. Bravo!
Thank you! I’m so glad the scene had the impact I was aiming for. I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts! 🫶
The jarring nature of having your consciousness plunged into a virtual world was well described. Lots of intrigue built with the error messages, ghostly words and unexpected locations. I’m a sucker for deadly academies.
That’s so kind. I appreciate it! Deadly academies are my jam. Hope this one does its job. 🤍
I love the concept! Your writing is gripping and atmospheric, the setting of the eerie ferry is deliciously ghosty, and the AI guide too. I’m not usually a sci-fi reader, but this intrigues me. I’ll keep following along!
I’m thrilled it intrigues you. Thanks for the lovely comment! 🤍
I was also thinking this would make for a great TV series!
That would be a dream, thank you! 😊
Wow, a potential path of no return! And I can say that everyone in Ava’s place would think the same: “But if I die here, I’ll wake up in reality?”
I know I would.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on it! 🫶
It’s great, and I can’t wait to see what’s next!
Why would they have her sign up for a virtual world and not tell her how to wake up or get out of it?
Great question! The VR work program was designed to run while she sleeps, so under normal circumstances she’d just wake up in the real world like nothing happened. But something went wrong before she completed the onboarding process, so she never learned how the system works and ended up accidentally trapped at the academy. Thanks so much for reading!
Ahh, I see what you’re saying. Here I am thinking of people who might need to get out of it because something is wrong in the simulation, or simply to pee, lol.
Lol, yes. Pee breaks are definitely necessary! 😂 That’s really helpful feedback. I need to make the sleep component clearer.